I'm working on a rewrite now -- sentences 2 & 3 are somewhat repetitive,
so am trying to replace sentence 3 with Chris's aim to tell we we offer
attendees.
Stay tuned...
-mpg
-----Original Message-----
From: Chris Holmes [mailto:cholmes@openplans.org]
Sent: Friday, May 19, 2006 10:05 AM
To: dev@visibilitycommittee.osgeo.org
Cc: Peter Moran
Subject: Re: [VisCom] OSGeo Flyer for Where 2.0 - review by
Friday noon PSTYeah, I like the black, and I like the second page best too.
I'm not in love with the text though. Not sure I have time
to think of
something better, but it'd be nice if it was something a
slight bit more
inspiring, instead of merely descriptive...I mean, this:
'As the leading supporter of
such technologies, we provide financial, organizational and legal
support to the open source geospatial community. In addition,
OSGeo acts
as an independent legal entity to which community
members can contribute code, funding and other resources.'Is only really important to people thinking of putting their
projects in
OSGeo.I think where attendees would care more about what it offers
them. That
we gather the highest quality os projects together, that we
ensure legal
protections for _them_, if they build on top of our stuff, ect. And
that they can more effectively spend their money on a shared
resource,
instead of just paying out to commercial providers.And that anyone can join and become a part of us...
C
Michael P. Gerlek wrote:
> Hmm, my notes are pretty much a subset of everything Tyler
said (esp.
> the awkward 1st sentence).
>
> On the last sentence, it would be nice if we toned down the drama a
> little and added something geo-specific after the
"because". I've got a
> good writer on staff here, I'll run it by him and get you some
> suggestions in an hour or two.
>
> I'm happy with the black. Let's be big and bold and make
the inkjets
> work a little harder.
>
> -mpg
>
>
>
>>-----Original Message-----
>>From: Tyler Mitchell [mailto:tylermitchell@shaw.ca]
>>Sent: Friday, May 19, 2006 7:58 AM
>>To: dev@visibilitycommittee.osgeo.org
>>Cc: Peter Moran
>>Subject: Re: [VisCom] OSGeo Flyer for Where 2.0 - review by
>>Friday noon PST
>>
>>On Thursday 18 May 2006 15:08, Peter Moran wrote:
>>
>>> - I like the second page, with the logo on the upper left.
>>>
>>> - I think logo should be bigger - to fill the space and be bigger
>>>relative to the headline text.
>>>
>>> - The last line of text seems a bit over the top to me.
>>>
>>> - The black is growing on me as dramatic.
>>>
>>>The compass could be dimmed down and used as a watermark on Tyler's
>>>Flyers, as a unifying element.
>>
>>Peter, I agree with all your points here.
>>Is it too late to change some wording? I think the wording of
>>the text could
>>be a bit tighter.
>>
>>-Add "The" to the begining, so it matches tagline in logo and
>>makes an easier
>>to read sentence. If they can keep the name all on one line
>>still, that
>>would be good.
>>-Drop the ", or OSGeo --" - It interrupts the flow a bit too
>>much and I think
>>with the logo, we have defined it already.
>>-I'm not sure about "open geospatial technologies", let's not
>>get lost in the
>>world of "open" and explictly say "open source" or, since we
>>repeat it later,
>>drop "open" altogether in this spot.
>>-Can we add in "promote" somewhere too? Maybe replace one of
>>the "supporter"s
>>with promoter to make it less redundant and to touch on one
>>of our key roles.
>>
>>-With my suggestions, the first couple sentences could read:
>>"The Open Source Geospatial Foundation is a not-for-profit
>>organization
>>dedicated to the collaborative development of technologies
>>and data. As the
>>leading promoter of such technologies, we provide financial,
>>organizational
>>and legal support to the open source geospatial community. ..."
>>
>>I have no bright ideas for the final sentence - it's close
>>but could be
>>better.
>>
>>I just started to wonder if I'm going to be able to get this
>>ad, the graphics
>>and fonts in a format that I could work with. I won't be
>>able to use Adobe
>>design formats. Perhaps we could also get this in a vector
>>format, like SVG,
>>Postscript or even in a Word format??
>>
>>Tyler
>>
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