Major thoughts:
It's too short-
* The "not vetted" and "providers welcome" parts are too short to
justify their own sections?
* What other content can we add to this thing to snazzy it up a bit?
Editors like to see product names, company names, quotes from reputable
people, etc.
Minor thoughts:
* para 1: "offering services around..." -- the "around" part sounds
awkward; perhaps just "offering services supporting..."
* para 1: contains "organizations and individuals" in one sentence, then
"firms and individuals" in the next sentence (and uses same "X and Y"
construction later in document) -- too wordy / excessive; perhaps reword
it to introduce and then use the generic term "service provider" or
something?
* para 3: I'd swap the ordering of "are brought to our attentions by
service providers" and "demonstrate sufficient interest"
* para 4: "searchers" could better be expressed as "users" or
"customers" or..?
* copyright date should be 2007
-mpg
-----Original Message-----
From: viscom-dev-bounces@lists.osgeo.org
[mailto:viscom-dev-bounces@lists.osgeo.org] On Behalf Of
Frank Warmerdam
Sent: Tuesday, July 31, 2007 2:20 PM
To: Visibility Committee Discussion List
Cc: Web committee discussions
Subject: Re: [Viscom-dev] RE: [Webcom] Service Provider
Directory Launch
Jason Birch wrote:
> I've made some minor changes. Feel free to revert 
Jason,
It all looks good.
> Is there any problem having the PR as by-nd and the page
it's included
> on as by-sa?
I don't see this as an issue. The by-sa as boilerplate only
applies to
text not otherwise licensed.
Best regards,
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